And today we have an MRP (My RolePlay) character description that makes us miss those azure wastelands of poetic frostiness. I give you... Sadness.
Or, as the pillar of eloquence, Neville, put it:
'A visage of pearly porcelain' Ah, unlike all that matte porcelain you find lying around. Also, anyone who has a 'visage' instead of a face is immediately going on my ignore list. 'Glittering jewels of soulful, wistful, deep seascape' Ah, I see two adjectives wouldn't be nauseating enough for you. Let's hammer the point in with another one then refuse to use the word 'eyes'. Couldn't you at least stoop to 'orbs'? It's right up there with 'visage' but at least it vaguely sounds like it could be related to eyes, rather than just picking pretty words and substituting them, regardless of whether they make sense or not. Ah, and I see your seascape's lingering again. You do so love that word, even if it does imply that parts of your face are only hanging on for a while, which carries with it the logical conclusion that you're playing a beautiful, depressed leper. 'A beauty, naturally.' Oh, up until here I thought you were describing a gurning hunchback. Thank you for labouring that point further. 'These days, smiles are rare.' She's sad, have you picked up on that yet? 'Autumn's touch lingers' Enough with the lingering! 'and teeters' Oh God, it's going to fall off! She really is a leper. 'upon dainty, frail fingers as rings of heritage, bejeweled and bright.' I think you need to put the thesaurus down, this is barely resembling a sentence as it is.
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